Some people think that if a country is already rich, any addition in economic wealth does not make its citizen happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It would help if you chose a position before writing. Pay attention to the question that the country is already rich, so try not to touch the points like increasing people's income, reducing the gap between rich and poor, etc.
Support the view
- Wealthy will drive people to pursue greater success, but they will be unhappy if they expect too much.
- In a prosperous society, some people pursue luxury goods and show off wealth, which leads others to unhappiness.
Oppose the view
- Wealthy lets us do more things that contribute to society.
- A wealthy society gives people more time with family and friends.
Some people think that being richer can not bring happiness to citizens in a wealthy country. I can't entirely agree with this idea, although citizens in a developed nation may be happier with friends and families or create some hobbies.
The gap of wealth exists everywhere, even in a developed country. The ...
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some. The 2nd and 3rd paragraph can be merged.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but there are rather too many errors for a higher band here.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
People are divided into the opinion of whether wealthy countries are happier and not. Some people believe that developed countries have enough money so that their people are happier than developing nations, but others condemn this statement. Although I agree with this statement, many researchers ponder that money does ...
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Band: 5.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
This is a hard question to write. Compare between rich and poor countries isn't a smart way, because happiness isn't the same thing for them. The question is to suggest discussing happier or not in the same country.