The advances in science and technology have brought people closer and caused people to have a similar lifestyle. In my opinion, it seems to be a positive development as many people can utilize the technological advances.
Technology has spread worldwide as people might be culturally different, but they're exposed to ...
Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Don't express a clear position in the whole essay. The example (Plastic) isn't persuasive here. It isn't a good example of your "positive" view; besides, the conclusion is too long.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, but has errors in word choice and spelling.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are errors in grammatical control, like in punctuation.