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IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer: In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7025
Question:
In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Answer 1
Food habits of human beings are changing day by day in most countries we could observe this trend in recent years. People prefer to consume international fast foods than locally cultivated or traditional foods. This will create a very long-lasting devastating effect on the personal family and social life. I fully ...
By SINOJ PX, 2021-04-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 316
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some sentences are wordy or too long to understand. The second paragraph can be shrunk.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex sentence forms, but there is a lack of grammatical control in original version, which can cause some difficulty for the reader.
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Answer 2
The popularity of fast food is increasingly becoming the focus of local and global citizens' concerns due to their injures impact on individuals and society at large. Although some obvious reasons support this opinion, it positively influences individuals' well-being and economic development.
The opponents of fast ...
By Farid, 2021-05-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 353
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but a little off-topic. You should focus on 'negative effect,' and agree or don't agree with it.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but there are a few word choice errors. E.g. 'countless benefits' shouldn't be in academic writing.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
It has already been replaced some traditional food by international junk food brand in some nations nowadays. A group of people thinks that junk food brings a massive disadvantage to our societies and families. In my opinion, I strongly agree that we should encourage individuals to consume healthy and traditional diets ...
By Song Zhen, 2021-04-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 387
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural),
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