When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7033
Question:
When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion.
Answer 1
Life is a one-time affair, and to spend it fruitfully, one must experience utter peace. While some people would opt for a life without work, I completely coincide with the argument that choosing to work helps attain calmness, and it is the recent trend followed by individuals. This essay will discuss the former point ...
By Manali, 2021-06-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 349
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the essay didn't answer the question exactly, off-topic a little.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are presented, extended, and supported, arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.
Answer 2
It is quite a natural response that people tend to give out without actually giving a thought about their choice. However, if you were to ask the same question to a poverty-stricken person, they would choose a job as they know the struggles of not having work. In my opinion, a life without a profession almost seems to ...
By Dilon Fernando, 2021-06-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 251
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors.
Answer 3
Engage in an earning activity is an essential element for an individual's success and survival. However, an argument states that most people give preference to live without engaging in any work. I can't entirely agree with this statement because a person prefers to get balanced work and life, which does not affect any ...
By Sinoj PX, 2021-06-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 291
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-You need to put forward more reasons for why you disagree with the statement, and the essay didn't match the question fully.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.