When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work

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Question:
When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion.
Answer 1
It is quite a natural response that people tend to give out without actually considering their choice...

Firstly, if a person chooses to avoid working, there is no source of income for the person and possibly the rest of the family, considering the circumstances...

Moving on, having a job gives a person a sense of purpose and progress where they can feel that their workplace position reflects their hard work and determination...

In conclusion, all of what we have has come through the work of various talented people. So, if we choose not to work, we might be restricting ourselves to something special we may possess...
Band: 6
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All Words22012355%
Top 300 Words126 (57%)49 (39%)38%
300 - 1000 Words50 (22%)36 (29%)72%
Over 1000 Words44 (20%)38 (30%)86%
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Link Words: 16 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 9; Average Length: 135 characters; Words/Sentence: 24
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and the response has a clear progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Answer 2
Engaging in an earning activity is essential for an individual's success and survival. However, an argument states that most people prefer to live without engaging in any work...

Firstly, living without participating in any physical or mental activity is impossible. Work is always presented as employment through which a person gets wages or salaries...

Human beings are called social animals, and they always deal with society. People will feel worthless when they are not participating in social activities...

In conclusion, I will say that many people want to sit idle and interested only in daydreaming. However, another majority of people opt to participate in the productive process, which helps them become self-reliant and socially molded personalities...
Band: 5.5
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