The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important for governments.

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Question:
The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important; governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
Select your view at first.

Your point should focus on society. If you support the topic, you should say why helping adult illiteracy is important to society. If you object, you should talk about why it is important to educate youth in view of society.

The topic is a comparative one. It can be said that one of the two sides is more important than the other, or it can be said that both are of the same importance.

Supporting points
  • Provide education for adults (preferably vocational training);
  • Have the opportunity to find a job;
  • Reduce crimes caused by unemployment and poverty
  • If adults know the benefits of education, they will naturally send the children to school;
Opposing points
  • Provide education to children to improve basic learning ability;
  • After growing up, it is more likely to receive higher education to avoid becoming illiterate, the burden of society;
  • Provide fair education to children to create a fair society.
Answer 1
Every individual has the right to get an education. Through education, a person achieves academics and essential values in life...

Perhaps the future is in the hands of youth, so correctly educating the young is beneficial. Young people have harnessed modern technology...

Young people's education plays a vital role when considering a nation's futuristic vision. Youngsters are more intelligent and innovative than older adults...

Nevertheless, the education of adults is also a requirement. Others may exploit them. To facilitate these, they should have basic knowledge of their first language...

To recapitulate, no one has the right to deny the fruit of learning. Even if so, educating young people should be necessary because they can uplift their nation prosperously...
Band: 6
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All Words27714050%
Top 300 Words139 (50%)48 (34%)34%
300 - 1000 Words59 (21%)37 (26%)62%
Over 1000 Words79 (28%)55 (39%)69%
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Link Words: 15 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 24; Average Length: 71 characters; Words/Sentence: 11
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has education(8), for(6), young(6), have(5), they(5), their(5), and(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response. But adult education's discussion is too weak.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.