Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views.

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7043
Question:
Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
Discuss views of both sides.

The first view: may make mistakes
  • Knows the serious consequences;
  • Is more cautious in the future;
  • Encourage children to try different choices;
  • Build the ability to innovate in the future;
  • Improve decision-making ability;
The second view: avoid making mistakes
  • Let children abide by the rules;
  • Be better adapt to society;
  • Avoid accidents due to cautiousness;
  • Avoid the waste of time and money;
  • Help children grow up smoothly;
Answer 1
There is a belief that adolescents can be allowed to learn from mistakes, while others believe that adults should prevent from doing something wrong. From my perspective, I would agree with the view to provide youth with opportunities to experience setbacks.
On the one hand, there are reasons why some people place ...
By Henry He, 2021-08-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed, didn't discuss the two sides in a balanced way.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression, but the conclusion is rather short, due to a lack of development of ideas.
Lexical Resources:
-Vocabulary is the strongest aspect of the response; substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
There are different attitudes towards making mistakes. Whether or not parents should give sufficient freedom for children to make mistakes has been a hot topic. I will discuss both sides in this essay before an appropriate conclusion is given.
Firstly, the opposing side of the debate is always arguing that ...
By Jack Ma, 2021-08-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally, although there is some repetition, e.g. "tend" occurs twice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.