Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
If you support it, the focus will be on the government and say its advantages (you can also explain its reasons). If you object, it will focus on private enterprises and say their advantages (you can also explain its reasons).

Supporting viewpoints:
  • Results can be shared
  • Society is more equal
  • Ensure research is legal and compliant
  • Avoids dark or dangerous research
  • Public investment pushes private companies' research
  • Is beneficial to the public's well-being in the long run
Opposing viewpoints
  • Private companies produce faster results
  • Spends less money with high performance
  • Reduces the burden on the government
  • Helps the economy developing
Answer 1
Some people assume that scientific research is supposed to be supervised by the government instead of private organizations...

Many reasons can clarify the essential part of the government's role in controlling scientific studies...

Moreover, nowadays, many scientific research projects are funded by government grants and financial support derived from public money such as taxes...

To sum up, I believe that the role of government in controlling scientific studies is essential to ensure that all the research findings are purely to benefit the community and ensure that the financial funding allocated to this research is worthy...
Band: 6.5
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Answer 2
Scientific research plays a vital role in the progress of a nation. It is argued that the government should control and fund research, not private organizations...

There are several reasons to support my viewpoint. Firstly, the government can provide financial assistance to various research projects...

When private organizations conduct research, their chief concern is protecting their interests. This explains why the research conducted by coffee companies or gum companies only highlights the benefits of their products...

To conclude, after analyzing the various aspects of the argument, it is not hard to see that the government funding of research is in the interests of the public...
Band: 6
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Top 300 Words113 (48%)43 (36%)38%
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Over 1000 Words81 (34%)52 (44%)64%
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Link Words: 8 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 94 characters; Words/Sentence: 14
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has research(12), government(9), that(4), not(4), this(4), their(4), should(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt, but further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, and cohesive devices are used, though mechanically.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.