Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7046
Question:
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
If you support it, the focus will be on the government and say its advantages (you can also explain its reasons). If you object, it will focus on private enterprises and say their advantages (you can also explain its reasons).

Supporting viewpoints:
  • Results can be shared
  • Society is more equal
  • Ensure research is legal and compliant
  • Avoids dark or dangerous research
  • Public investment pushes private companies' research
  • Is beneficial to the public's well-being in the long run
Opposing viewpoints
  • Private companies produce faster results
  • Spends less money with high performance
  • Reduces the burden on the government
  • Helps the economy developing
Answer 1
Some people assume that scientific research is supposed to be supervised by the government instead of private organizations. I personally, share a similar view with this statement with the reasons stating below.
Many reasons can clarify the essential part of the government's role to control scientific studies. First ...
By Henry He, 2021-08-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the example of "pharmaceutical companies" is too long, and not fit to "research" topic.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are presented, extended, and supported, arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.
Answer 2
Scientific research plays a vital role in the progress of a nation. It is argued that research should be controlled and funded by the government and not private organizations. This essay agrees that the government should carry out various research works in different fields and outline why the government should be ...
By Cloudy Ford, 2021-08-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt; but further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.