Some people argue that it is the government's responsibility to transport children to school, while others believe parents should do that. Discuss both views.

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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Question:
Some people argue that it is the government's responsibility to transport children to school, while others believe parents should do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer Hints:
You need to discuss the views of the two sides in balance, then give your opinion.

Government's views
  • Governments have legislative power on education matters.
  • Regulate school buses and other resources.
  • Have the experience and ability to offer better transportation than parents.
Parents' views
  • Governments have already undertaken public education; extra services cost too much.
  • It is difficult to cope with different services for each student.
  • Parents have more flexibility to send children to school.
Answer 1
Nowadays, some people are staying far away from the schools of their children. So, a question has been raised, whether the parents should take care of the commutation of their children to schools or the government should be responsible for it. I am in favor of the latter due to the reasons mentioned in this essay ...
By Greensea Red, 2021-11-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 290
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the safety discussion isn't sufficient.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.