Some people believe that university students should pay all the costs of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not society as a whole.

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Question:
Some people believe that university students should pay all the costs of their studies because university education only benefits students themselves, not society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
It's an easy question. Your position should be "higher education helps individuals as well as society", so the result is "students aren't responsible for all tuition fees." Remember, this topic should not only discuss students paying tuition but also discuss to whom higher education is useful. Obviously, it's much harder to write if you take the opposite position.

Points
  • Students receive university education helps social progress.
  • Study professional knowledge to realize youth potential.
  • Social development is the government's job, so it should play a role.
  • The education fair is a basic human right, cannot exclude poor ones from university.
Answer 1
It's a boiling issue about university tuition that students bear the whole cost, or society covers some...

First of all, many advanced countries adopted a system in which the government lends money for university students' tuition to the students at a meager interest rate...

Secondly, there is evident proof that highly educated people have tremendously contributed to improving society in many aspects...

In conclusion, the two obvious reasons are that many advanced countries provide many ways to lessen the financial burden of studying at university, and university education is conducive to improving our society...
Band: 6.5
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words32014846%
Top 300 Words152 (47%)50 (33%)32%
300 - 1000 Words53 (16%)30 (20%)56%
Over 1000 Words115 (35%)68 (45%)59%
Other Comments (coyerntynu)
Link Words: 11 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 127 characters; Words/Sentence: 20
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has university(15), students(10), have(8), that(7), society(7), for(5), many(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. You may add 'education fair' to support your point.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some word-choice errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.