In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.

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Question:
In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
You can choose either agree or disagree to write, but "agree" or partial "agree" should be easier to answer.

Agree
  • Government should be held accountable for health issues, including Children's health.
  • Children's health problems will finally impact social development.
  • Children's health problems are mainly related to food, the government can regulate food business behavior.
Disagree
  • Society needs to drop some unhealthy conventions, especially in food or eating.
  • Parents should encourage children to exercise outdoor, manage menus in scientific ways in order to prevent overweight.
Answer 1
In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. The trend has been even worse in recent years. Some people believe that governments are liable to resolve this issue. I agree with them to some extent. In my opinion, this situation is the responsibility of the government, society, and individuals ...
By Backado Nu, 2022-01-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 282
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting your ideas, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice. A few sentences are wordy.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.