Some countries have spent a large amount of money on bicycles. Why has this happened? Is it the best way to solve traffic problems?

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Question:
Some countries have spent a large amount of money on bicycles. Why has this happened? Is it the best way to solve traffic problems?
Answer Hints:
The mixed question has two parts: reason and if it's the best solution.

Reason
  • City traffic jams. (The question hints the key is the traffic problem.)
  • Serious air pollution from cars.
  • Exercise and a healthy lifestyle.
Is it the best way
  • Bicycles help address traffic jams, in short and local trips.
  • Bicycles are just a small part of transportation.
  • Investing in public transportation is more important than in bicycles.
Answer 1
Many countries invest a large sum of money to ease the use of bicycles. The main reason is that those countries think bicycles help reduce traffic congestion, a significant problem in cities downtown...

The bicycle plays a vital role in alleviating traffic jams, and the countries that suffer from traffic congestion spend lots of money to encourage people to use the bike...

Although these projects significantly contribute entirely to reducing the traffic problems, there are also a few alternative ways to alleviate traffic-congestion-related pain...

In conclusion, some countries have spent much money on bicycles to address traffic congestion over recent years...
Band: 7
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All Words27714050%
Top 300 Words125 (45%)47 (33%)37%
300 - 1000 Words51 (18%)36 (25%)70%
Over 1000 Words101 (36%)57 (40%)56%
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Link Words: 19 (including link phrase: 3)
Sentences: Number: 13; Average Length: 133 characters; Words/Sentence: 21
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has traffic(9), and(5), countries(4), bicycles(4), not(4), such(4), money(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response, but you need more persuasive reasoning for the 'best way' part.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite broad and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.