It is undeniable that the world has advanced rapidly in the new century. Many people opine that today our living standards are much better than our ancestors. This essay concurs with this statement and has manifold reasons to substantiate it.
People were more susceptible to different diseases in those days, and ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Main ideas are relevant, but some would benefit from further development. You can write longer, and separate "transportation" and "communication" as 2 paragraphs. The comparison should focus on new and old centuries.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The writing is well organized, and there is clear progression throughout, although the use of some cohesive devices could be more flexible.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.