Many cities replace farmlands and parks with houses. Is it positive or negative?

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Question:
Many cities replace farmlands and parks with houses. Is it positive or negative?
Answer Hints:
This is a pros and cons topic. In most cases, this type is in a juxtaposed structure, you should try not to elaborate separately. However, for this farmlands/parks topic, separating them is also an option to answer.

Pros
  • Solve housing problems of large cities.
  • Helps to develop economics in urban.
  • Offer more chances for low-income people.
Cons
  • Degrade the environmental quality of cities.
  • Impact people's living negatively in cities, e.g., crowed.
  • Enlarge the differences between urban and countryside.
Answer 1
To handle the growing demand for housing, mayors of many cities are changing farmlands and parks to establish residential areas...

This development has some positive effects. With the sea of people flooding into metropolises to seek better employment possibilities and wealthier living, the demand for house supply is increasing overwhelmingly in large cities...

However, we cannot overlook the detriments of the change. One reason is the removal of parks may negatively impact citizens' health...

In light of the above, it is justifiable to shelter citizens by substituting places of residence for farmlands; however, we must keep and even develop more parks and other public facilities...
Band: 6.5
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Link Words: 20 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 114 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. Separate farmlands and parks aren't a common way to answer the 'positive/negative' questions, but it's a practical option for this topic.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, although there are a few choice errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy. Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.