Many cities replace farmlands and parks with houses. Is it positive or negative?

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Many cities replace farmlands and parks with houses. Is it positive or negative?
Answer Hints:
This is a pros and cons topic. In most cases, this type is in a juxtaposed structure, you should try not to elaborate separately. However, for this farmlands/parks topic, separating them is also an option to answer.

  • Solve housing problems of large cities.
  • Helps to develop economics in urban.
  • Offer more chances for low-income people.
  • Degrade the environmental quality of cities.
  • Impact people's living negatively in cities, e.g., crowed.
  • Enlarge the differences between urban and countryside.
Answer 1
To handle the growing demand for housing, mayors of many cities are changing farmlands and parks for establishing residential areas. However, I think we may accept moving farmlands to suburban but giving up parks in town is detrimental.
This development has some positive effects. With the sea of people flooding into ...
By Teemy Young, 2022-03-27  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. Separate farmlands and parks isn't a common way to answer the "positive/negative" questions; but for this topic, it's a practical option.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few choice errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy. Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.