It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such a development outweigh the advantages?
Pros and cons question. Notice that the key to the topic is "everyone owns a car."
- Convenience in traffic and living
- Higher efficiency in time
- Easy living and real-time information
- Stimulate supply
- Promote the economy
- Cars are used excessively, wastes energy
- Too many cars impact the environment
- Frozen food in the fridge may hurt the health
- Children spend too much time on TV and game
Some people believe that every individual worldwide wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Most of these commodities are common in everyone's home. But what are the advantages of this trend, and what are its disadvantages? In this essay, I will discuss both sides in detail and draw some conclusions.
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt. Notice the key of the question is about "one owning a car", not just with or without car.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.