In today's cities, people continue to use cars and motorcycles, which have made transportation increasingly difficult. Why? What is the best way to stop it?

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Question:
In today's cities, people continue using cars and motorcycles, making transportation increasingly difficult. Why? What is the best way to stop people from using cars and motorcycles?
Answer Hints:
The question is to analyze a topic and give a solution. Notice that the question emphasizes "the best way."

Reasons
  • Cities are getting bigger and bigger
  • Commuting distance is increasing car and motorcycle
  • Governments are not using resources well
  • Public transportation is not good
Solutions - choose one to discuss
  • Government increases public transportation
  • More tax and cost on private traffic tools
  • Strict road management and penalty
Answer 1
Now we know that most of the population is using cars and motorcycles for commuting, even though people know that these harm the environment...

The predominant factor resulting in the unceasing usage of private vehicles is that they are time-saving and flexible...

Nevertheless, there are potential solutions that could prove effective in decreasing the usage of private conveyance...

In conclusion, due to the time constraints and convenience provided by personal transportation, it is used by many people...
Band: 7
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All Words32417052%
Top 300 Words156 (48%)50 (29%)32%
300 - 1000 Words61 (18%)42 (24%)68%
Over 1000 Words107 (33%)78 (45%)72%
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Link Words: 24 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 17; Average Length: 118 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(11), that(6), for(5), people(5), private(5), time(5), this(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but the solution should be about the best way.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed.
Lexical Resources:
-Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.