In today's cities, people continue to use cars and motorcycles, which have made transportation increasingly difficult. Why? What is the best way to stop people from using cars and motorcycles?
The question is to analyze a topic and give a solution. Notice that the question emphasizes "the best way."
- Cities are getting bigger and bigger
- Commuting distance is increasing car and motorcycle
- Governments are not using resources well
- Public transportation is not good
Solutions - choose one to discuss
- Government increases public transportation
- More tax and cost on private traffic tools
- Strict road management and penalty
Now we know that most of the population is using cars and motorcycles for commuting purposes, even though people are aware that these have a detrimental effect on the environment. This essay will examine the reasons and suggest possible solutions to alleviate this problem.
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but the solution should be about the best way.Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed.Lexical Resources:
-Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.