In today's world, people spend a lot of money on appearance because they want to look younger. Why does this happen? This is a positive or negative development?
Question: In today's world, people spend a lot of money on appearance because they want to look younger. Why does this happen? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Answer Hints: The essay has two parts: reason and your position. Choosing negative is relatively easy to write than positive.
Reason
Looking younger means looking stronger and smarter.
Society prefers offering more chances to young people.
Some jobs and chances are only open to young or nice appearance.
Negative development
Medicine or treatment causes side effects and health issues.
Spending lots of money, which should have better usage.
Looking younger cannot really make people stronger or wiser.
Positive development
Some jobs and chances are only open to young or nice appearance.
Giving people confidence.
Promote diverse living and consumption.
Answer 1
Due to the rapid technological progression, people can let themselves look younger. Some have great wishes to look young because it means stronger and wiser and is attractive in some job sectors. I believe it's a negative trend as it causes many harmful diseases and wastage of wealth. The main reason is that today's ...
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