In more and more countries, people choose to give money on special occasions rather than personally giving gifts. Why might this be the case? Positive or negative?

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Question:
In more and more countries, people choose to give money on special occasions rather than personally giving gifts. Why might this be the case? Is it a positive or negative development?
Answer Hints:
You need to answer two parts: the cause and your opinion - negative or positive. Either side is ok to choose.

Cause
  • Lack of understanding of the giftee, avoid offending the giftee.
  • Money is easy for the giftee to use; it's accepted in most cases.
  • Save time searching for fittable gifts.
  • Don't disclose the giver's information and preference.
Negative
  • Leaving the nature of the gift, giving money cannot pass particular feelings, like friendship or congrats.
  • A financial gift is easy for the giftee to consume; it possibly becomes a tool for corruption.
Positive
  • Avoid misunderstanding and misleading between the two sides for a particular present item.
  • Save time choosing and preparing gifts.
  • The giftee can easily enjoy the gift, the gift value won't be wasted.
Answer 1
Initially, a gift isn't simply money. But currently, financial gifts have become more appreciated than various items. While such presents may show a lack of interest in another person's life, I believe it is a positive tendency because of its universality to let a giftee handle more flexibly, like purchasing a long ...
By Dayong Heny, 2022-08-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 363
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but as an IELTS essay, it's too long..
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The writing is well organized, and there is clear progression throughout, although the use of some cohesive devices could be more flexible.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation.