In more and more countries, people choose to give money on special occasions rather than personally giving gifts. Why might this be the case? Positive or negative?
Question: In more and more countries, people give money on special occasions rather than personally giving gifts. Why might this be the case? Is it a positive or negative development?
Answer Hints: You need to answer two parts: the cause and your opinion - negative or positive. Either side is ok to choose.
Cause
Lack of understanding of the giftee, avoid offending the giftee.
Money is easy for the giftee to use; it's accepted in most cases.
Save time searching for fittable gifts.
Don't disclose the giver's information and preference.
Negative
Leaving the nature of the gift, giving money cannot pass particular feelings, like friendship or congrats.
A financial gift is easy for the giftee to consume; it possibly becomes a tool for corruption.
Positive
Avoid misunderstanding and misleading between the two sides for a particular present item.
Save time choosing and preparing gifts.
The giftee can easily enjoy the gift, the gift value won't be wasted.
Answer 1
Initially, a gift isn't simply money. But currently, financial gifts have become more appreciated than various items...
The reasons behind the tendency to present money are likely to be its universality as a gift and easiness of preparation...
Some think money isn't a real gift that should reflect more meanings, such as love, care, or friendship...
To conclude, giving money as a gift has become more popular now. I am sure that in such a way, some people may lessen the risk of providing an unfit gift, and giftees may be generally more thankful because money is higher in value and more flexible to handle...
Sentences: Number: 21; Average Length: 98 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
Suggestions: IELTS Essay Format: -The essay is too long, try to shrink it. -You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has gift(9), money(8), more(6), and(6), for(5), such(4), may(4); try to decrease duplicated words. -High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some. -Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. -Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response: -Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but as an IELTS essay, it's too long. Coherence and Cohesion: -The writing is well organized and has a clear progression throughout, although using some cohesive devices could have been more flexible. Lexical Resources: -The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation. Grammar Range and Accuracy: -There is a wide range of structures; these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation.