Some think secondary and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers.

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Question:
Some think secondary and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagreeļ¼Ÿ
Answer Hints:
This 'agree or disagree' topic is a half-to-half question. You can select either side. The keywords are 'choose,' 'academic courses,' and 'practical courses.'

Agree
  • Youth has the right to decide on their career, so they can select lessons in high school to prepare.
  • More than half of people have no chance to work in the academic-related area; too heavy academic lessons waste time.
  • Practical courses help students understand particular fields; it's valuable for them to prepare for post-high school life.
Disagree
  • If missing academic courses in high school, it's hard to get them back. Some youth will lose the chance to develop in academic fields.
  • High school students are too young to select the correct future career. A wrong decision wastes their time or even talent.
  • Parents and teachers shouldn't encourage students to replace academic courses with practical ones; it hurts the ideal of education equality.
Answer 1
Many countries encourage their youth to choose job direction in high school stage. Some high school students are often encouraged to focus on practical courses such as carpentry or auto repair, while others interested in academic pursuits are funneled into college prep programs. I agree with that high school students ...
By Chris Ma, 2022-12-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
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Band: 7
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Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the structure has room to refine. You may shorten the introduction and enhance the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task. Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.