Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than showing the cultures or artworks from other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than showing the cultures or artworks from other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
It's an agree or disagree essay. You had better agree with the statement; otherwise, you might ruin your writing test because the reverse side will challenge political correctness. To express your international or global view, besides concentrating on local, you should accept a few stuff from other countries in your home museums.

  • Museums and art galleries themselves are part of local culture.
  • The nature of museums is to conserve the local culture.
  • Society spends money on museums to hope they serve local people.
  • If concentrating on others' stuff, it's without cultural value.
  • Globalization is changing the local concept and redefining the cultural connection.
  • Stuff from other countries may matter to local or local people.
  • Some museums are for broad or global topics, like car museums or movie museums.
Answer 1
Museums and art galleries are a part of the culture in any area, although they are for preserving and representing cultural values and histories of centuries or even longer...

Educating people about the history and traditions of a country is the primary reason we have museums in the first place...

We build museums to keep cultures, which should be our own culture. However, in recent centuries, the world has changed dramatically...

To conclude, traditional museums should nurture national history and local heritage. Still, we also accept collections from other parts of the world due to cultural connections under globalization...
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Top 300 Words144 (44%)56 (34%)38%
300 - 1000 Words72 (22%)46 (28%)63%
Over 1000 Words108 (33%)62 (37%)57%
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Link Words: 27 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 18; Average Length: 115 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
IELTS Essay Format:
-The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(14), museums(8), are(8), cultures(7), should(5), they(4), other(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position that is directly relevant to the prompt is presented. Some ideas aren't supported with clear examples; the example about The Art Institute of Chicago paints may lead to controversy and needs a more internationalized example.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are various complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and reasonable control over grammar and punctuation.