Television is good entertainment for adults. But its pros and cons for children have been a question for a long time. Some people believe it is not suitable for children to watch television in all ways, whereas others think it helps develop their growth. In my view, both points are correct, as will be explained in the ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some, e.g, 'environment'.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though the use of informal expressions, such as 'at large', is not appropriate in this type of response.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.