Ex-prisoners committing crimes after being released is a complex and pressing problem. There are various reasons why ex-prisoners may re-offend, and addressing this issue requires a multi-faceted approach. In this essay, I will discuss the causes of ex-prisoner recidivism and suggest possible solutions.
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The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few repetition, try to decrease duplicated EX-PRISONERS and RECIDIVISM..
Grammar Range and Accuracy:-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.