Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views.

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Question:
Some people think governments should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
You should state the reasons for both views. But it's not a half-to-half topic; your opinion must support that the government should pay for health care and education. The key to the argument is if health care and education are the responsibility of a government.

Support
  • Health care and education are the fundamental human rights that governments should cover.
  • Unfair social service creates poverty and disturbance and hurts the whole society.
  • Inadequate care and education in poor families impact the next generation; those missed talents are the loss of all people.
Object
  • Health care and education are personal and diverse choices; individuals should take responsibility.
  • Governments covering health care and education means more taxes and fewer options for hardworking people.
  • Public services usually cost more with lower performance. The whole society has to pay more for health care and education.
Answer 1
The provision of healthcare and education is a fundamental concern for any society. While some argue that the government should be responsible for providing healthcare and education, others believe these services should be left to the private sector...

On the one hand, those who argue that the government should pay for healthcare and education claim that these services are essential to the well-being of society...

On the other hand, those who believe that healthcare and education should be left to the private sector argue that government involvement leads to inefficiencies and a lack of innovation...

In my opinion, I believe that the government has a responsibility to provide primary healthcare and education to its citizens...

In conclusion, while some believe that healthcare and education should be left to the private sector, I think that the government is responsible for providing primary healthcare and education to its citizens...
Band: 6.5
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Link Words: 26 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 142 characters; Words/Sentence: 22
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(18), that(16), healthcare(12), education(12), should(10), for(7), government(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, and the writing is ok. But the question isn't about 'public goods and private sector,' but basic human rights. So, the essay didn't catch up with the topic closely.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.