The debate over the importance of employee vacation time is a contentious one. Some people argue that employers should give their staff at least four weeks holiday a year to make employees better at their work. I agree with it.
Four weeks a year isn't much. This is because taking a fair break from work is crucial ...
Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Only partially address the prompt, The answer is a little off the question: at least four weeks. It's just for a generic vacation topic..Coherence and Cohesion:
-It is a good response that would achieve an even higher score if there was more focus on 'four weeks' or 'long vacation'.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few choice errors.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.