The debate over the importance of employee vacation time is a contentious one. Some people argue that employers should give their staff at least four weeks holiday a year to make employees better at their work. I agree with it.
Four weeks a year isn't much. This is because taking a fair break from work is crucial ...
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:-Only partially address the prompt, The answer is a little off the question: at least four weeks. It's just for a generic vacation topic..
Coherence and Cohesion:-It is a good response that would achieve an even higher score if there was more focus on 'four weeks' or 'long vacation'.
Lexical Resources:-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few choice errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.