Achieving a balance between work and other aspects of life can be challenging for many people for various reasons. In the essay, I will present some obvious causes and discuss how to handle this puzzle.
The first is economic and living pressures. Societal and workplace expectations often create stress for ...
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed. The solution part is weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.