Some think dangerous extreme sports such as skydiving and rock climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Some think dangerous extreme sports such as skydiving and rock climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
The answer is to disagree because no government can ban these sorts of extreme sports. To match the question, you must mention skydiving and rock climbing in the essay. Besides, the essay should have a paragraph to show the safety concerns.

Reasons not to ban
  • Individuals' rights to engage in activities that do not pose a significant risk to others.
  • Extreme sports discover and develop valuable life skills and deepen our knowledge about nature and ourselves.
  • Extreme sports can contribute to the economy through tourism, events, and related industries.
  • Establishing safety standards can save more people if governments opt for regulation rather than outright prohibition.
Address the safety concerns
  • Governments establish safety standards and licensing requirements.
  • Education and awareness campaigns to inform the public about the risks associated with extreme sports.
Answer 1
The unprecedented growth of accidents in dangerous sports has become a significant threat to participants. Many argue that life-threatening sports should be prohibited, while others oppose this statement. I am at loggerhead with this statement. I disagree with the ban and think those sports should be played under ...
By Rick Lee, 2023-11-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 350
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas are usually expressed fully, but the example is old and not precise, which degrades the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Vocabulary is the strongest aspect of the response. Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.