The unprecedented growth of accidents in dangerous sports has become a significant threat to participants. Many argue that life-threatening sports should be prohibited, while others oppose this statement. I am at loggerhead with this statement. I disagree with the ban and think those sports should be played under ...
Band: 7.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas are usually expressed fully, but the example is old and not precise, which degrades the essay.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-Vocabulary is the strongest aspect of the response. Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.