Some think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice.

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Question:
Some people think it is better to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
You need to discuss the points of the two sides. It's an open topic; you can choose either side as your opinion. Note that there are comparatives in the question, so pay attention to the comparison in your support.

Migrate
  • Leave the home country for a more affluent country
  • Leave the home country for a place where your skill is rare
  • Work and life opportunities are better
Stay hometown
  • Stay in the country without language barriers and cultural differences
  • Look for a suitable city or job
  • Have more opportunities for stable work and life
Answer 1
In globalization, many individuals migrate to other places as they reach maturity; however, others prefer to live in their hometowns for the rest of their lives...

On the one hand, a different environment means new life and opportunity. It makes people shift to other cities or countries for a brighter future...

On the other hand, many people are willing to live in the same place they have lived since childhood...

In my opinion, individuals should be open to choices for a better future, whether it requires moving to another city or living in their hometown...
Band: 6
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Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 109 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has they(8), their(7), for(7), and(7), life(4), many(3), other(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
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-The response has a clear overall progression, but it is somewhat mechanical.
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