We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection, and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing, or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Answer 1
The computer is an excellent invention of the modern world; why don't we leverage it. There is nothing wrong with depending on computers...

Using computers at a hospital is vital because it helps the hospital management keep track of every patient's medical history...

Furthermore, without computers, it would have been impossible for us to find the presence of water on the moon...

Despite having a few disadvantages, dependency on computers is more appreciable but should be within limits...
Band: 6
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All Words25716062%
Top 300 Words132 (51%)57 (35%)43%
300 - 1000 Words38 (14%)33 (20%)86%
Over 1000 Words87 (33%)70 (43%)80%
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Link Words: 18 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 102 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
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Answer 2
Computers are a relatively new invention. The first computers were built sixty years ago, and their influences have affected our everyday lives in the last thirty years or so...

Personal computers were introduced as recently as the early eighties. In this short time, they have tremendously impacted our lives...

In the future, computers will be used to create more extensive and even more sophisticated computers...

There is a certain inevitability that technology will progress and become increasingly complex. We should, however, ensure that we are still in a position where we can control the technology...
Band: 5.5
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