We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2005
Question:
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection, and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing, or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Answer 1
Computer is a great invent of modern world, why don't we leverage it? There is nothing wrong in depending on computers. Nowadays, parents want their child to study in a school...
By Sak Thivel, 2018-02-22  View full answer
Total words: 265
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
Answer 2
Computers are relatively new invention. The first computers were built sixty years ago and it is the last thirty years or so that their influences has affected our everyday life...
By Jade Lee, 2017-10-15  View full answer
Total words: 282
Band: NA
  • You had better re-write the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use some rare or uncommon words to show your vocabulary range and level. Conclusion seems too plain, try to update it.