A growing number of people feel that people should not exploit animals and animals have the same rights as humans

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A growing number of people feel that people should not exploit animals and animals have the same rights as humans. In contrast, others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including food and research uses. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Animal rights or protecting animal rights are supported by a strong group in modern society. Some believe that animals should not be endangered by humans, but others point out that human needs are more important and people should be allowed to use animals for different purposes...

According to most historical documents, humans have employed animals for a better life since civilization existed...

Some people worry about the mentioned trend as many animal species have been extinct because of exploitation by humans...

By contrast, some other argues that God has created animals for a better human life, and it is inevitable that people use animals as their targets...

I think, therefore, this occasion is such a sophisticated issue, and both views concern one aspect of human and animal rights...
Band: 7
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All Words36116545%
Top 300 Words180 (49%)61 (36%)33%
300 - 1000 Words81 (22%)43 (26%)53%
Over 1000 Words100 (27%)61 (36%)61%
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Link Words: 29 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 141 characters; Words/Sentence: 24
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has animals(15), and(13), for(11), humans(9), that(6), their(6), life(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
Some people believe that animals should be treated the same way humans are and have similar rights, whereas others think it is more important to use them as we desire for food and medical research...

About the exploitation of animals, people believe it is acceptable for several reasons. Firstly, they think that humans are the most important beings on the planet, and everything must be done to ensure human survival...

However, I do not believe these arguments stand up to scrutiny. To begin, it has been shown on numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories via animal rights groups that animals feel as much pain as humans do, and they suffer when they are kept in cages for long periods...

To sum up, although some people argue killing animals for research and food is ethical, I would say there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that this is not the case, and, therefore, steps must be taken to improve the rights of animals...
Band: 6.5
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