Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their health and diet

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Question:
Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their health and diet. Others, however, believe that governments should ensure their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Lifestyle is eventually a person's choice, but a healthy lifestyle sometimes becomes an issue to debate...

On one hand, if an individual is determined to lead a healthy life, he would need very little help from the state...

On the other hand, there is no denying that a government also has a vital role in ensuring a better lifestyle for its citizens...

Considering both viewpoints, I would like to conclude that the healthy lifestyle of citizens in a country is a combination of individual choice and government initiatives and policy...
Band: 7
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All Words34613438%
Top 300 Words165 (47%)50 (37%)30%
300 - 1000 Words68 (19%)33 (24%)48%
Over 1000 Words113 (32%)51 (38%)45%
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Link Words: 28 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 134 characters; Words/Sentence: 21
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has lifestyle(17), healthy(13), and(11), government(10), choice(6), should(6), that(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
An increasing concern for many governments worldwide is their citizens' declining health due to a poor diet...

Undoubtedly, individuals must take some responsibility for their diet and health. The argument to support this is that adults have free will and make their own choices about what they eat and the exercise they do...

Despite these arguments, there is also a case for advocating the state's intervention. People these days often have little choice but to depend on fast food or ready meals that are high in sugar, salt, and fat due to the pressures of work...

Considering both sides of the issue, I would argue that although individuals must take ultimate responsibility for what they eat, governments also have a role to play as only they can regulate the food supply, which openly encourages a poor diet...
Band: 6.5
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