Around the world, children learn English as a second language at school

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2013
Question:
Around the world, children learn English as a second language at school. However, in some places, they also learn at kindergarten. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of learning English at kindergarten.
Answer 1
Foreign language learning is one of hot topics in some countries, especially among young parents. Some educators have insisted that children should learn a new language at an...
By U Cheoma, 2018-02-12  View full answer
Total words: 353
Band: NA
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has LANGUAGE(11) LEARNING(7) THAT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 2
As English has become the dominant language worldwide, vast numbers of people are learning it. The age of English-language acquisition is also lowering at the same time....
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-16  View full answer
Total words: 399
Band: NA
  • The essay is too long, suggset to shrink it.
  • You had better re-write the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has CHILD(10) THAT(10) ENGLISH(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 1 seems too plain, try to polish it.