Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is better for their own health and benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2018
Question:
Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is better for their own health and benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Vegetarians avoid consuming meat and fish because of considering body healthy and environment green. Both purposes will be discussed in this essay as well as provide several...
By Soni Ariawan, 2017-10-28  View full answer
Total words: 256
Band: NA
  • The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(5) MEAT(4) FISH(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 2
The number of vegetarians in a community may depend on various factors, for example the traditions of the country, the wealth of the country, the religion or the age group....
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-17  View full answer
Total words: 344
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(10) MEAT(7) MAY(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.