Besides many advantages, some believe the Internet creates many problems

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Besides many advantages, some believe the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Answer 1
In today's society, it is universally believed that the Internet has been gaining popularity at a fantastic rate...

Those who favor that the Internet has many advantages give their reasons as follows. In the first place, it is evident that the Internet brings us great convenience and efficiency...

On the other hand, some people hold a different attitude and argue that the Internet has many weaknesses...

There is probably a little bit of truth in both arguments. For my part, I agree with the latter view that the Internet has more disadvantages than advantages...
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Answer 2
The Internet is the core of everyday life for many city guys. It changes almost every aspect of living, studying, and working of them, from entertainment to business...

First, from a positive point of view, the Internet makes communication more accessible as now people can communicate with families or relatives far away...

Otherwise, besides the goods brought by the Internet, some negatives come with it. First, porn is emerged as the Internet is developed...

To sum up, besides the positive things it brings, the Internet also causes many problems...
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words23312754%
Top 300 Words117 (50%)44 (34%)37%
300 - 1000 Words43 (18%)30 (23%)69%
Over 1000 Words73 (31%)53 (41%)72%
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Link Words: 23 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 100 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has internet(9), with(7), life(4), and(4), from(4), also(4), for(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.