As languages such as English, Spanish, and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out

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As languages such as English, Spanish, and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?
Answer 1
As the world becomes more integrated, the need for common means of communication is becoming more pressing...

It is true as the balance of power among groups of people throughout history has shifted, languages have arisen, changed, and died out...

There are, indeed, several benefits to preserving minority languages. Retaining the language of a community often means that other forms of culture are maintained: songs, literature, and local traditions...

In short, it is possible, and in many cases desirable, to make an effort to preserve minority languages...
Band: 8
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Answer 2
Some languages, like English, Spanish, and Mandarin, are more popular, and some are in reverse. Many minority languages are indeed under threat of distinction...

People must recognize that minority languages are spoken by the limitation of people and areas. They still play an important role in storing the values of cultures and experiences throughout generations...

Perhaps the most effective way to conserve minority languages is to spend public money on minority language education programs...

Another critical component of preserving minority languages is the establishment of organizations that specialize in research and plan to maintain minority languages...
Band: 5.5
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Link Words: 22 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 110 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
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IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has languages(10), and(10), minority(9), are(5), that(5), their(5), some(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.