The birth rate is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years

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The birth rate is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030, over one-third of most developed countries' population will be 65 and over. What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation?
Answer 1
Many experts are predicting that in the next 50 years, about one-third of the people in developed countries will be the elderly generation...

Firstly, they will lack productive people, vital for economic development. With the shortage of productive laborers and professionals, it will be difficult for them to boost the economic sector, as factories will face difficulties recruiting productive workers...

Governments could consider some solutions to prevent the negative consequences of this issue. One is providing additional facilities for their residents to have children earlier...

In conclusion, many people predict that most developed countries will face an aging problem in the future...
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(12), will(11), countries(9), their(7), people(6), for(6), young(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
Nowadays, most people worry about overpopulation and living in crowded cities. However, we are predicted to have the opposite problem by 2030, when one-third of the population will be aged 65 or over, and birth rates are expected to decline...

By 2030, the percentage of the population aged 65 or older will have risen significantly to more than 30%...

However, I believe the most significant impact will be on the younger generation. In 2030, the younger generation will need to work much harder to support the large number of older people...

So, what can be done now to prevent these problems. Firstly, I believe that governments of developed countries should find ways to encourage people to have larger families and increase the birth rate...
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