When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out

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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Answer 1
Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications significantly impact a nation’s traditional skills and ways of life...

First, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by 'mainstreamed' ways of life, which are greatly influenced by modern technologies...

Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas for the development of modern technologies...

To conclude, traditional skills and lifestyles are increasingly becoming useful alternatives to the homogeneity brought about by global applications of modern technologies...
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GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words28413748%
Top 300 Words125 (44%)39 (28%)31%
300 - 1000 Words40 (14%)26 (18%)65%
Over 1000 Words119 (41%)72 (52%)60%
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Link Words: 20 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 12; Average Length: 160 characters; Words/Sentence: 23
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(11), skills(9), traditional(8), technologies(7), some(7), ways(6), life(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.