Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old

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Question:
Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
t The discussion about whether children should stay in school until 18 or 14 is a topic of concern nowadays for many parents. Some people believe that the age of 18 is enough, while others think it should be 14. This essay can be looked at as having both views.
To begin with, people have a strong assertion about ...
By Manpreet kaur, 2020-05-24  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 314
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent IELTS essay, response to the question very well. you may get a higher score if addressing minor grammar and vocabulary issues.
Answer 2
It is a widely held belief that school education for young kids must be until 18 years of age. But at the same time, there is also a strong counter-argument amongst some sections of people that studying at school until 14 years of age is sufficient. However, I think that this a matter to be debated in light of several ...
By Sri G, 2020-06-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 334
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay, but has small syntax errors. Besides, a few sentences are wordy.
Answer 3
People nowadays go to great lengths to ensure education is not a privilege but a right. That goes to tell the pivotal rule it plays in our society. The duration of compulsory education, however, remains incongruent.
Though others might question its necessity, I believe that one should stay in school until one turns ...
By mp, 2020-11-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 254
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. Further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.
Answer 4
It is irrefutable that education is a very pivotal weapon of the individual life and open the door thousands of opportunities for them. Some people advocate that every people get knowledge at least eighteen years age. I think it is fruitful for both demos and nation. I will not only elaborate on this notion but also ...
By jarry, 2020-03-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 482
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The essay is ok, although there are some small errors. But, it doesn't meet with the question well, which is about teenagers and study. The essay talks on nation and education.
Answer 5
It has been noticed that in most of the countries, students should study until they are eighteen. In my opinion, it is compulsory for a student can gain professional skills through study.
On the one hand, consistently learning can help students become much more successful. In most of the country, students must ...
By Siiiiilvia, 2020-04-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 348
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Good essay. The logic has a small defect: "Nurse" training is still a type of education. Besides, don't need to use "Chinese ... HUAWEI", as we never say "America Apple". You should show an international view in IELTS writing.
Answer 6
School is not only a way to learn academic knowledge but also to shape our whole life. Some people believe that students should attain education during the age of fourteen, but others condemn this statement. Although according to my opinion children should continue their schooling at higher secondary, it is completing ...
By jarry , 2020-05-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 418
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Good essay. Your reasoning isn't powerful, especially at the second support. Vocabulary skills need to enhance, "enough" is used in the wrong position 3 times.
Answer 7
[8:33 am, 22/05/2020] Dr Mugdha:
Some would argue that children ought to complete their studies till the age of 18, while others say that continuing education until 14 years of age is sufficient. Although learning basic skills is more than enough at the age of 14 years, I believe it is better to continue study ...
By Dr Mugdha , 2020-05-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 355
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Good essay. The structure is its main merit. You may move "However, I believe, for mastering in a particular field, it is mandatory to continue education after the age of 18 years." to last conclusion. Besides, small grammar errors should be avoided.
Answer 8
It's argued that the time dedicated to schooling is probably more than needed in the society. While some people believe that teenagers are ready to move from school at the age of 14, others think that they need more time, till 18 years of age to be mature and well-oriented. This essay will discuss both points of view ...
By Mayssa, 2020-05-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 347
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
You didn't give your opinion in conclusion. Besides, the "doctor" example cannot support its point; the Canadian article looks like a fake one, this sort of example will undermine your credibility.
Answer 9
It has been suggested that school-leaving age should be raised and pupils ought to continue their education until 18 years of age, while others hold the notion that school training until 14 is sufficient to guarantee success in life and work.
In this essay, I will justify that students ought to be required to stay ...
By Arzun Arif, 2020-05-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 389
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Too weak about the view of 14, and it shouldn't matter with dropout. You need to follow a generic IELTS structure, 4-5 paragraphs in total. Besides, "a silver spoon in their mouth" shouldn't occur in an academic essay.
Answer 10
Education has been playing a worthy role since ancient times, and in this global era, everyone needs proper knowledge regarding every field. Some people think that children should study till 12th grade while others believe that it is enough to get schooling till 14 years of life. I will discuss both views and conclude. ...
By karen, 2020-06-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 335
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Good essay. In structure, a better way is two sides' views plus your choice. Merging your option into one side answered the question but not very clearly.
Answer 11
Certain individuals are of the credence that a child should pursue education till he is fourteen years of age while others opine that formal education must continue till they reach eighteen years. In my opinion, one should be schooled to 18 years of age due to various reasons, which I will elaborate in detail in the ...
By Vinay A Dikshit, 2020-06-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 359
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Language skills are ok, but the response needs to be refined. You missed why some think 14 is enough. "Discuss both views" is a basic requirement. Besides, too many uncommon words also risk your score.
Answer 12
This statement says Everyone needs to study until eighteen. In my opinion I entirely agree with this statement, As I think education is a fundamental right to all and everyone should get a chance of proper education. This essay will discuss why this is necessary.
Today the world is moving fast and changing every day ...
By shay, 2020-03-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 297
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Refine your reasoning, an actual person example may enhance your view easily. The connection between "government's law" and "necessity" isn't very strong.