More and more people no longer read the newspaper or watch TV programs to get news. They get news about the world through the internet. Is this a positive or negative development?
People prefer to read the news posted online rather than watching it on TV or reading in the newspaper. However, this practice might not be beneficial to everyone. In this essay, I will discuss the negative and positive impact of the development and voice my opinion with appropriate examples.
Earlier on, people who ...
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.
With technology becoming increasingly accessible, everything is at your fingertips. A lot of individuals find tabloids and TV as means to get news outdated. These people become informed about the world through the internet. I believe this is a positive development which I will further discuss in my essay.
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Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the conclusion is unclear and needs to enhance.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Use a variety of complex structures, but should decrease simple and short sentences.