In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, has been encouraged. Is this trend a positive or negative development?

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #6049
Question:
Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil, and natural gas, are used in many countries, while in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, has been encouraged. Is this trend a positive or negative development?
Answer Hints:
Pros and cons question. This question is easier to answer with "encourage and promote the use of alternative resources." The description of fossil fuels in the first sentence is a background, not an argument content. Examples appear in the topic: wind, solar power, are renewable energy sources, which are different from nuclear energy, so it is not appropriate to discuss nuclear energy on this topic.

Advantages:
  • Use renewable resources;
  • Increase energy supply;
  • Stabilize prices and help everyday lives.
  • Reduce greenhouse gas emissions
  • Reduce pollution and climate change;
  • Avoid competition for fossil resources
Disadvantages:
  • Needs to destroy certain natural environments;
  • Affects animal and plant habitats;
  • Relatively expensive and requires state subsidies
Answer 1
Fossil fuel is not eco-friendly, and its usage comes with huge environmental costs. Considering the detrimental effects, fossil fuels have on the environment and public health, green fuel, such as solar, hydro, and wind power, could be the answer to our future energy demand. It is a good thing that many countries have ...
By David Lidaye, 2021-08-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 305
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but there are rooms to enrich for a higher band here. E.g, there are 2 times of 'It is a good thing,'
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.