Whether scientific research should be funded by commercial or private organizations rather than governments depends on various factors, and there are arguments on both sides. I am in favor of private or commercial funding for scientific research and believe that scientific research shouldn't rely on any government ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas are usually expressed fully, but they sometimes need more support. COVID-19 vaccinations are indeed excellent examples of Private or commercial funding. It's a persuasive essay. Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.