Some people think in order to continually improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #6675
Question:
Some people think in order to continually improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others feel that this would result in a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Many nowadays believe that their students should evaluate modern teachers to improve their performance and boost the quality of the current teaching methods. In contrast, the school authority believes that students' evaluation could spoil the educational process, leading to the downsizing of current curriculum quality. ...
By Farid, 2021-05-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 399
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-Vocabulary is the strongest aspect of the response, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly and there is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Answer 2
Nowadays, the education system, previously a teacher-centered approach, has changed gradually to a student-centered technique. Consequently, some people argue that secondary school students should be encouraged to evaluate and appraise their teachers. At the same time, some skeptics claimed that it might lose respect ...
By Fatty, 2021-05-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 355
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, such as article (a, an, the), they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
Education plays a vital role in the development of an individual's character and behaviour. So the quality of education must be improved in every sphere of schooling. Teachers are the key components to determine the quality of education. Some people think that the students must criticize teachers, while others think ...
By Sinoj PX, 2021-05-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 320
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Main ideas are relevant, but some would benefit from further development.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 4
To ameliorate the education system, students' sustainable assessment of teachers should be applied; however, this tendency might negatively affect faculty's reputation. Although the proponents of this statement would have apprehensible reasons, I would coincide with those who claim that teachers ought not to be ...
By Malik, 2021-05-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 298
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some sentences are wordy or too long to understand.Use too many passive voice sentences.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.