If people go to live in another country, they should follow the local customs and traditions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
If people go to live in another country, they should follow the local customs and traditions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
The correct answer is to agree with the statement. It's easy to develop your view for most writers. If choosing the reverse side, theoretically, it is also acceptable but more challenging to persuade readers.

Support the view
  • Immigrants should like where they relocate, either country or community.
  • It helps individuals to establish positive relations to live and work.
  • It helps individuals avoid legal, cultural, and social compliance troubles.
  • It helps to build integration and social harmony.
Oppose the view
  • Keeping one's own cultural identity is a basic human right.
  • Immigration countries or communities should keep cultural diversity.
  • Minorities' culture must be respected and protected.
Answer 1
I firmly believe that people should follow the local customs and traditions after they go to live in another country...

Embracing local customs helps individuals integrate into the community. People can build connections, make friends, and foster a sense of belonging by participating in cultural practices...

Legal compliance and cultural sensitivity are also significant concerns. Some customs may have legal or social implications...

Adhering to local customs can enhance professional and social opportunities and build positive relations...

Some think individuals should maintain aspects of their own cultural identity. I agree it's important for minorities...
Band: 7.5
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words37017246%
Top 300 Words163 (44%)53 (30%)32%
300 - 1000 Words42 (11%)27 (15%)64%
Over 1000 Words165 (44%)92 (53%)55%
Other Comments (ricklee)
Link Words: 36 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 26; Average Length: 95 characters; Words/Sentence: 14
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(26), local(11), customs(9), should(5), culture(5), can(5), newcomers(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position that is directly relevant to the prompt is presented.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A wide range of structures are used flexibly.