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IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer: In some countries around the world men and women are having children at a later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7017
Question:
In some countries around the world men and women are having children at a later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?
Answer 1
The average age of giving birth for women has been significantly increasing through the last two decades due to new goals and priorities prevalent among modern women. This new notion leads to many changes that concern not only the family institute but society in general.
The common tendency to have babies about 20 ...
By Tamara, 2021-03-09  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 278
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
In this modern century, equality among men and women has long been established, creating equal opportunities for their careers. Nowadays, couples are prioritizing many things over having children. Possible reasons for this will be discussed in this essay.
Equal career opportunities for men and women are more ...
By kat, 2021-03-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 295
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Use a variety of complex structures, but the writing lacks grammatical control.
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Answer 3
Nowadays, men and women in some countries have children at a later age compared to the past. This essay will provide the reasons for this occurrence and discuss the effects on society and family life.
First and foremost, the major reason that people have children at a later age is due to their career path. Education ...
By shloka, 2021-03-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 272
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Main ideas are relevant, but some would benefit from further development, especially the effects part.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors.
Answer 4
In this modern era, it is seen that, in some countries around the world, men and women seem to have children at a later stage in their life as compared to the past. There are various reasons for such kind of development.
One of the reasons is, humans these days seem to be very focused on attaining excellent ...
By JD, 2021-03-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 303
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss some reasons and effects, but ideas are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response is organized into paragraphs, but the focus of each is not always clear.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary. Some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are errors in grammatical control.
Answer 5
There used to be times when couples used to have their first baby within the first two years of marriage, but now times have changed, parents have their children later. There are many causes for this development which are having many impacts on society.
The very first reason for this is generation. There are a lot ...
By Jagga , 2021-03-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 254
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, the ideas were limited and the cause missed the "effects on society."
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 6
These days people think about becoming parents at an older age compared to before. There are various reasons this phenomenon is happening and has certain effects on governments and individuals, such as the number of children minimized per parent than earlier.
Nowadays, humans indeed like to have children after a few ...
By Disha Patel, 2021-03-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 282
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem word. Some ideas aren't supported clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are errors in grammatical control.