Some people think that advertising may have positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because advertising makes individuals less satisfied with what they are and have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is commonly argued that product and service promotions have the capacity to boost the economy significantly. In contrast, others believe that it can have a detrimental effect on the social well-being of people. In my view, although advertising plays a crucial role in economic growth, it has several drawbacks as it ...
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Band: 6.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss some benefits and disadvantages, but ideas are limited.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors.
While some believe that advertising is highly beneficial to the economy, others claim life would be better without it, as advertising frequently causes people to feel miserable. As for me, I believe that the positive effects that advertising has on the economy are more significant than the negative ones, that influence ...
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Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling. You should avoid uncommon abbreviation when selecting words, like PR, you are taking an internationalized test.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are some errors in grammatical control, e.g. noun plural.
Many people think that there are many benefits of watching advertisements; however, others think it has many drawbacks. It may affect becoming people unhappy with who they are and what they have. In my opinion, advertising has both pros and cons.
On the one hand, those people who say seeing advertisements have ...
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Band: 5.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss both sides, but ideas are limited. Besides, the shoe example is away from the question, cannot support the essay.Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.