Some people think that advertising may have positive economic effects

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Question:
Some people think that advertising may have positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because advertising makes individuals less satisfied with what they are and have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
While some believe that advertising benefits the economy, others claim life would be better without it, as advertising frequently causes people to feel miserable...

On the one hand, advertising provides crucial information to consumers, giving them the main features and benefits of the product...

On the other hand, it is thought that many people are negatively affected by advertising, as it prompts them to measure themselves against others...

In conclusion, some people think advertising is highly beneficial to the economy, whereas others suppose it causes people to feel unsatisfied with their lives...
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Answer 2
It is commonly argued that product and service promotions can boost the economy significantly. In contrast, others believe that it can have a detrimental effect on people's social well-being...

People are more likely to patronize a product or service based on what is portrayed in advertisements...

On the other hand, advertising tends to cause social harm by decreasing the self-esteem of some individuals...

In summary, though advertising has benefited some people, its disadvantages outweigh its advantages...
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Answer 3
Many people think that watching advertisements has many benefits; others believe it has many drawbacks...

On the one hand, those who say seeing advertisements has benefits can access new things. Suppose a company provides an ad on TV about their newly launched products...

On the other hand, there are many adverse effects on those who prefer to watch advertisements. First, people, especially young ones who spend more time seeing advertisements, can choose the wrong advertisements and buy things...

In conclusion, even though I concede that seeing advertisements has advantages for people, they know more about the new items quickly...
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Link Words: 16 (including link phrase: 3)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 108 characters; Words/Sentence: 17
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has people(9), advertisements(9), that(8), has(8), for(7), many(6), who(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed; there is an attempt to discuss both sides, but ideas are limited. Besides, the shoe example is away from the question and cannot support the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response has a clear overall progression, but it is somewhat mechanical.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.