An increasing number of developing countries are expanding their tourist industry. Why do you think it is the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Mixed topics. The first question is about the reason, the second question is your comment: positive or negative.
The points of the first question
- The country’s poverty
- Doesn't have the ability to develop other industries
- Depends on tourism to make money
The points of the second question
- Generate a lot of employment opportunities
- Increase foreign exchange income
- Stimulate the economy of developing countries
- Tourists use public infrastructures and increase construction
- Cause adverse effects on the local environment
- Affecting local residents, more conflicts between residents and tourists, residents and the local government
Tourism is expanding rapidly in many developing countries. Many countries have taken extensive initiatives to expand their tourism sector, and some of them have gained enviable popularity. I believe that the reasons for developing countries to embark on this industry are many folds, and this is quite a positive ...
Band: 7,5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end.Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Nowadays, tourism plays a vital role in the economy of various countries, and it is also being enhanced in economically developed nations. This happens due to two main reasons, which we reveal in this essay, and in my opinion, it is generally a positive movement.
First of all, it is common knowledge that tourism ...
Band: 6,5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
- Help LinkLexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but there are some errors for a higher band here.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.