In the modern world, parents always hope their children to be successful in the future and put lots of pressure on them. There are some reasons to explain this trend, and this development has both positive and negative.
The apparent reason we can see is that the world is changing dramatically and young people have ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices. But a few sentences are wordy. The example of "my younger brother" can be removed or replaced with a better one.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
- Help LinkGrammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.