Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills.

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Question:
Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication hurts young people's reading and writing skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
You can choose either agree or disagree. In general, we will focus on "writing skills." However, "reading skills" is a part of the question too. Especially if you disagree with the argument, "reading skills" is a good point.

Agree
  • The intelligent devices make young people lazy to learn language skills.
  • Auto vocabulary and grammar features hide the lack of writing skills.
  • Lots of informal expressions disturb normal language education in both writing and reading.
Disagree
  • Auto vocabulary and grammar features help very much in learning correct language knowledge.
  • The intelligent devices are a new chance for students to get new words and correct wrong words.
  • Online communication means lots of writing and reading, which helps build language skills through practice.
Answer 1
There is no doubt that IT technology has changed the world. Some believe that increasing communication via technology such as laptops, cell phones, and so on has had a detrimental impact on young individuals' reading and writing proficiency...

Mobile applications and desktop software, which provide language support, have been developed to make users' lives more manageable and play a sterling role in improving their language skills...

New communication software based on the Internet not only corrects words. It can provide hints of possible vocabulary and improve grammar skills while writing...

To conclude, although communicating with electronic gadgets has a few demerits, it seems more conducive to building vocabulary, improving writing skills, and helping individuals hone their language skills...
Band: 7.5
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Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(14), writing(8), skills(7), reading(5), which(4), more(4), their(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas are usually expressed fully, but they sometimes need more support.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a precise central topic that is developed.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.