Nowadays, some consumers are less influenced by advertising than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Question:
Nowadays, some consumers are less influenced by advertising than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?
Answer Hints:
The question has two parts: the reason and your opinion about positive or negative. In the reason part, you should compare it with the 'past.' Please don't ignore the word. For the latter part, you can choose either or both. It's an open question.

Reason
  • More methods and larger quantities to publish Ads.
  • A few cheating contents hurt Ads credit.
  • Consumers can get information from Google or social media.
Positive development
  • Shopping wisely decreases waste.
  • Small businesses can campaign easily.
Negative development
  • New products need more money to promote, adding cost.
  • Consumers doubt Ads' content; it impacts the Ads' effect.
  • Distrust between sellers and buyers is bad for the social atmosphere.
Answer 1
Advertising has been losing its influence in recent years, and I think multiple factors cause the trend and will explain them later. This change has both positive and negative affect on the current market and society. In my view, the negative side surpasses the former one.
The main reason is methods and volumes of ...
By Postee Shaw, 2023-02-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 303
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but the conclusion isn't clear, needs to rephrase.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.