Some think they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, but others believe government should control the use of freshwater as it is a limited resource.

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Question:
Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, but others believe governments should control its use as a limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
You should state the points of the two sides equally and then give your opinion. Supporting the government to control freshwater use should be an easy option.

People use freshwater as they want
  • Freshwater is a natural resource with no adverse impact on the environment.
  • Freshwater consumption is an everyday life or production requirement. Some freshwater use cases last generations - no reason to change them.
  • Freshwater supply is a business for modern society. Why can people not trade it fairly?
The government controls freshwater use
  • Freshwater isn't enough in some places; over-usage will hurt the environment, especially the ecosystem.
  • The severe freshwater shortage may impact living, sometimes we need to restrict unimportant usage, like car washing.
  • The freshwater shortage may increase prices and risk poor people's basic life.
Answer 1
While some people believe they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, others believe the government should control its use as a limited resource...

On the one hand, those who believe they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want argue that they are paying for it, so they should be able to use it as they see fit...

On the other hand, those who believe that the government should control freshwater use argue that water is a finite resource and that unrestricted use by individuals will lead to wastage and depletion...

In my opinion, I believe that the government should regulate the use of freshwater to ensure that it is used sustainably and equitably...

In conclusion, while some people believe that they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, I think that the government should regulate the use of freshwater to ensure that it is used sustainably and equitably...
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Top 300 Words232 (65%)54 (46%)23%
300 - 1000 Words60 (16%)27 (23%)45%
Over 1000 Words63 (17%)34 (29%)53%
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Link Words: 27 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 13; Average Length: 152 characters; Words/Sentence: 27
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has they(18), that(18), use(13), water(11), and(11), believe(7), government(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position that is directly relevant to the prompt is presented.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and each paragraph has a precise central topic.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite broad and shows awareness of collocation, but some words like 'use' and 'ensure' occur multiple times.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.