Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
If you agree with the view, you are too naive. This is an IQ question, and no room to agree with it. What you need to do is to prove why the view is wrong. Of course, you can develop some ideas to pay less taxes. However, disagreeing should be the basic stand.

Disagree - No taxes, no government
  • People who run government services need salaries and other administrative fees.
  • Government essential services, like national defense and infrastructure, cost huge money.
  • Social programs to help weaknesses and offer basic social insurance are also based on tax revenue.
Disagree with partial agree - Less taxes, smaller government
  • Middle and low-income people should have exceptions.
  • Privatization can decrease government expenses and lower tax levels.
Answer 1
Paying taxes is a fundamental aspect of modern societies and serves several purposes. Governments collect taxes to fund public services and infrastructure, such as education, healthcare, transportation, and national defense...

First, governments cannot consist of volunteers. Its day-to-day operations need money to operate, including salaries of public employees, administrative costs, and other expenses associated with governing...

The government's primary responsibility is national defense, infrastructure, and public goods. Although the service standards vary per development level, all governments must take these jobs, of which the tax revenue is the source...

Taxes are also used for public education, healthcare, and social welfare programs to help ordinary people, especially impoverished people...

While keeping all the money from taxation may seem appealing, it's essential to recognize that taxes play a crucial role in sustaining a functioning society...
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All Words33118154%
Top 300 Words135 (40%)51 (28%)37%
300 - 1000 Words51 (15%)42 (23%)82%
Over 1000 Words145 (43%)88 (48%)60%
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Link Words: 31 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 20; Average Length: 112 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(16), public(8), taxes(6), society(4), governments(4), services(4), are(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas in steps and developing them effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end.
Lexical Resources:
-Vocabulary is the strongest aspect of the response. Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.