Some believe the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Some believe the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
This is a simple question, and difficult to disagree with it. Of course, you can balance the views of two sides. But it should be easier to choose to agree.

Agree
  • Still in physical and mental development.
  • Short of training and practice.
  • Lack of knowledge about society, laws, and bylaws.
  • No enough responsibilities and ability to handle risks.
Disagree
  • Driving is a simple still, young people can take it.
  • Road accidents are not just by low-age drivers.
  • Young people can also attain sufficient training.
Answer 1
Increasing the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes is often suggested to improve road safety...

The first is that physical and mental development is not sufficient. Some studies suggest that the brain's frontal lobes, responsible for decision-making, continue to develop into a person's mid-20s...

Low-age drivers usually lack enough coaching and training. Driving requires a certain level of skill and experience...

The last, age is often associated with increased maturity and responsibility. More mature individuals may be better equipped to handle the responsibilities and potential risks...

Thus, increasing the minimum legal driving age can benefit road safety. A plain fact is that the minimum driving age is higher in some countries with lower accident rates...
Band: 6.5
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Link Words: 24 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 22; Average Length: 96 characters; Words/Sentence: 14
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(11), driving(9), road(8), age(7), more(6), safety(5), minimum(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. But each paragraph should have a sentence to highlight its point.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response has a clear overall progression, but it is somewhat mechanical.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.