Some believe the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Some believe the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
This is a simple question, and difficult to disagree with it. Of course, you can balance the views of two sides. But it should be easier to choose to agree.

Agree
  • Still in physical and mental development.
  • Short of training and practice.
  • Lack of knowledge about society, laws, and bylaws.
  • No enough responsibilities and ability to handle risks.
Disagree
  • Driving is a simple still, young people can take it.
  • Road accidents are not just by low-age drivers.
  • Young people can also attain sufficient training.
Answer 1
Increasing the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes is often suggested as a means to improve road safety. I agree with the idea for several reasons, although age isn't a factor alone in road accidents.
The first is that physical and mental development is not sufficient. Some studies suggest that the ...
By Rick Lee, 2023-11-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
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